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Enneagram Type 4 Board Archive Re: your poem.....Posted by Missy on February 25, 2002 at 00:32:30: In Reply to: It needs to be more condensed, tighter sentences. nt posted by Tiggy. on February 24, 2002 at 17:53:41: has a lot of potential... maybe you should revise it some to make it more concrete and flow better I agree w/ tiggy.. keep working at it and you'll have a poem that is extra great
: : a scattered shout whipping out of the darkness : : and spinning around my head. : : Flooded with lights the haze becomes blinding : : and brilliant in intensity, while water continues to pelt my clothes : : and soak me to the bone. : : Reaching through the windswept sheets of rain, : : a hand gropes forward then back, left then right, : : and I grasp it. : : Slipping across the muddy ground and tumbling forward : : I soon recover my balance then turn to speak, : : and the branch sways with the rest of the forest.
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